我看得出来，你的文笔很流畅、很细腻。但是你写得太自我陶醉，有点跑题了。虽然说写文章要有个性，但是读者的需要是最重要的。你写旅游文章一定要提供实用的信息。
wǒ kàn de chūlái ，nǐ de wénbǐ hěn liúchàng 、hěn xìnì 。dànshì nǐ xiě de tài zìwǒtáozuì ，yǒudiǎn pǎotí le 。suīrán shuō xiě wénzhāng yào yǒu gèxìng ，dànshì dúzhě de xūyào shì zuì zhòngyào de 。nǐ xiě lǚyóu wénzhāng yīdìng yào tígōng shíyòng de xìnxī 。
I can tell, your writing style is very fluid, very exquisite. But you write a bit too narcissistically, and go off topic some. Although you need character when you write, the needs of the reader are most important. When writing a travel article, you have to offer useful information.